holladayian/cover-letter-review-md

## cover-letter-review-md
Dear MicroSoft
> I think it is Microsoft, not MicroSoft.  It is hard to figure this out sometimes.  I applied to GitHub at one point and learned they capitalize things weird, so it is good to google a company to see how they capitalize stuff.  I usually add a generic greeting like "Hello there" or something instead of the company name.
, My name is Ian Holladay, and I am applying to a Software Engineer position in your company.
> The typical format I do here is "I would like to learn more about..", "I would like to be considered for..." the "Job title <position> at "Company".  Since you already mentioned the company, maybe just stick to the job title.  If there is a I or II there, I would leave out the numbers, so for this one just "Software Developer" or whatever it was.
 As a company that is on the forefront pushing the limits of human technology, I would like to add my skills to your business.
> This sentence is not grammatically correct - the subject of the first part of the sentence is you (I), so this makes it sound like you are the company pushing the limits here.  I would also say that you might want to aim for something more specific here.  If there isn't a real reason you want to work for Microsoft other than them being a prominent company, that is okay.  One way to make a more substantial reason is to review a company's culture page.  This is probably more relevent at smaller orgs, but maybe you can tie in some things from here that are compelling to you: https://careers.microsoft.com/us/en/culture
I have a friend who works for your company, AJ Carvajal, who describes MicroSoft as, "A peek into the future".
> Is AJ going to refer you?  If so, whoever is reading this cover letter probably already knows you know someone there and will probably talk to him.  If not, they will probably wonder why they aren't referring you.  I would leave this part out.
Currently I am learning the newest technologies in the frontend developement field, such as JavaScript, React, SCSS/SASS, and HTML. In this field, I have studied how to create applications that focus on UX/UI and audits for accessibility, preformance, and SEO.
> This is good, but I would make it "I am gaining experience in" or "I have completed projects implementing several technologies..." or something.  It will be more compelling if you talk about things you've done instead of framing it as what you're learning.  You could get a little bit more specific here and talk about single page applications, responsive design (Making it look good on mobile) or progressive web applications.  Basically, you want to show them you've done more than just a few tutorials and have actually written some complex react code.
With this education, I would like to build technologies with you that create better futures for users.
> This is another one that isn't really that clear.  I think you should frame what Turing is giving you as skills / knowledge and focus on what you can do rather than what you have learned.  They mention having a growth mindset specifically on their culture page, so I think I would focus on how you've learned the basics of front end application development.  I think speaking about a particular goal makes sense here, but I would try to make it more specific.
 Please consider me as a viable candidate to help your company grow our world.
> I don't know how I feel about the term "viable candidate" or the "help your company grow our world" part.  I usually like to wrap these up by thanking the person for their time.  I would leave this part out.
Thank you, Ian Holladay

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qiA21DhfwS_gp1c7h0LJTm1rcpyFagjnOVqA5JOuLbc/edit

Ian:
Dear MicroSoft,
My name is Ian Holladay, and I am applying to a Software Engineer position in your company.
Don't put your name again, they can see it in the signature, your resume, your application, etc, etc....
Great job letting them know why they are getting this letter
As a company that is on the forefront pushing the limits of human technology, I would like to add my skills to your business.
What skills to you have that could help them "push the limits of human technology" - find a connection to their mission/culture/peeps/etc that you can push - remember, you are a peacock, fluff your feathers on these cover letters
I have a friend who works for your company, AJ Carvajal, who describes MicroSoft as, "A peek into the future".
Expand on THIS! Also, move this to the first or second sentence. Bring your 'personal' connection in a lot earlier. Why does he describe it this way? What about that called to you?
Currently I am learning the newest technologies in the frontend developement field, such as JavaScript, React, SCSS/SASS, and HTML.
What what!!! Way to should out your skills. Typo on development. Can you also talk about soft skills or coding theory? In backend we have object oriented programming and single responsibility programming, what can you talk about in front end? What theories do you know that aren't languages/frameworks?
In this field, I have studied how to create applications that focus on UX/UI and audits for accessibility, preformance, and SEO.
Typo for performance. Expand on performance. Write out what SEO is since it isn't a language.
With this education, I would like to build technologies with you that create better futures for users.
Is there anything a little more personal you can bring in. WHY do you want to build tech to create better futures for users? Any thing you can tie into this?
Please consider me as a viable candidate to help your company grow our world.
Be more peacock (aka, they don't need to consider you a viable candidate. You already are. Now prove it)! "I look forward to hearing from you. I hope to join a company that is growing our world!"
Thank you,
Ian Holladay
Don't forget to include links that aren't your resume... like github or linkedin or whatever
	Dear MicroSoft
	> I think it is Microsoft, not MicroSoft. It is hard to figure this out sometimes. I applied to GitHub at one point and learned they capitalize things weird, so it is good to google a company to see how they capitalize stuff. I usually add a generic greeting like "Hello there" or something instead of the company name.
	, My name is Ian Holladay, and I am applying to a Software Engineer position in your company.
	> The typical format I do here is "I would like to learn more about..", "I would like to be considered for..." the "Job title <position> at "Company". Since you already mentioned the company, maybe just stick to the job title. If there is a I or II there, I would leave out the numbers, so for this one just "Software Developer" or whatever it was.
	As a company that is on the forefront pushing the limits of human technology, I would like to add my skills to your business.
	> This sentence is not grammatically correct - the subject of the first part of the sentence is you (I), so this makes it sound like you are the company pushing the limits here. I would also say that you might want to aim for something more specific here. If there isn't a real reason you want to work for Microsoft other than them being a prominent company, that is okay. One way to make a more substantial reason is to review a company's culture page. This is probably more relevent at smaller orgs, but maybe you can tie in some things from here that are compelling to you: https://careers.microsoft.com/us/en/culture
	I have a friend who works for your company, AJ Carvajal, who describes MicroSoft as, "A peek into the future".
	> Is AJ going to refer you? If so, whoever is reading this cover letter probably already knows you know someone there and will probably talk to him. If not, they will probably wonder why they aren't referring you. I would leave this part out.
	Currently I am learning the newest technologies in the frontend developement field, such as JavaScript, React, SCSS/SASS, and HTML. In this field, I have studied how to create applications that focus on UX/UI and audits for accessibility, preformance, and SEO.
	> This is good, but I would make it "I am gaining experience in" or "I have completed projects implementing several technologies..." or something. It will be more compelling if you talk about things you've done instead of framing it as what you're learning. You could get a little bit more specific here and talk about single page applications, responsive design (Making it look good on mobile) or progressive web applications. Basically, you want to show them you've done more than just a few tutorials and have actually written some complex react code.
	With this education, I would like to build technologies with you that create better futures for users.
	> This is another one that isn't really that clear. I think you should frame what Turing is giving you as skills / knowledge and focus on what you can do rather than what you have learned. They mention having a growth mindset specifically on their culture page, so I think I would focus on how you've learned the basics of front end application development. I think speaking about a particular goal makes sense here, but I would try to make it more specific.
	Please consider me as a viable candidate to help your company grow our world.
	> I don't know how I feel about the term "viable candidate" or the "help your company grow our world" part. I usually like to wrap these up by thanking the person for their time. I would leave this part out.
	Thank you, Ian Holladay

	https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qiA21DhfwS_gp1c7h0LJTm1rcpyFagjnOVqA5JOuLbc/edit

	Ian:
	Dear MicroSoft,
	My name is Ian Holladay, and I am applying to a Software Engineer position in your company.
	Don't put your name again, they can see it in the signature, your resume, your application, etc, etc....
	Great job letting them know why they are getting this letter
	As a company that is on the forefront pushing the limits of human technology, I would like to add my skills to your business.
	What skills to you have that could help them "push the limits of human technology" - find a connection to their mission/culture/peeps/etc that you can push - remember, you are a peacock, fluff your feathers on these cover letters
	I have a friend who works for your company, AJ Carvajal, who describes MicroSoft as, "A peek into the future".
	Expand on THIS! Also, move this to the first or second sentence. Bring your 'personal' connection in a lot earlier. Why does he describe it this way? What about that called to you?
	Currently I am learning the newest technologies in the frontend developement field, such as JavaScript, React, SCSS/SASS, and HTML.
	What what!!! Way to should out your skills. Typo on development. Can you also talk about soft skills or coding theory? In backend we have object oriented programming and single responsibility programming, what can you talk about in front end? What theories do you know that aren't languages/frameworks?
	In this field, I have studied how to create applications that focus on UX/UI and audits for accessibility, preformance, and SEO.
	Typo for performance. Expand on performance. Write out what SEO is since it isn't a language.
	With this education, I would like to build technologies with you that create better futures for users.
	Is there anything a little more personal you can bring in. WHY do you want to build tech to create better futures for users? Any thing you can tie into this?
	Please consider me as a viable candidate to help your company grow our world.
	Be more peacock (aka, they don't need to consider you a viable candidate. You already are. Now prove it)! "I look forward to hearing from you. I hope to join a company that is growing our world!"
	Thank you,
	Ian Holladay
	Don't forget to include links that aren't your resume... like github or linkedin or whatever