Proofreading Software and Silicon

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Proofreading Software and Silicon: http://softwareandsilicon.com/


Changes are sequential.
Sorry for the lack of diffs: I was reading in an anal app on a phone that doesn't allow edit or even copy/paste.


= Chapter 1 =

s/since we could it was only/since it was only/

s/$380/$380 per share/ 

s/one the the key/one of the key/ 

Areas outside software: yes, that's what CC is for.

This idyllic collaborative model: why call it idyllic? The point is valid already. And its sometimes acrimonious, witness De Raadt.

s/to extort the market and keep/extorting the market and keeping/

"as jealous of": you can't be jealous of your own stuff; you can jealously guard it.

Saying poverty "has been" conquered in India, China & (all) of Asia doesn't strengthen your argument, it makes you look like an ideologue.

"cheats", "routing around": Robin Hood anthropomorphising catchphrases that only antagonise. Don't face the choir.

s/an person/a person/

"and beep when": we beep? Or phones do? 

"Starving activists" hardly sounds aspirational or sustainable, and its at odds with the prestigious meritocracies you mention above. 

"politically atheist" is an unfortunate phrase, if you just mean that they are not aligned with existing parties (not gods). They are still identically political.


= Chapter 2 =

"that's how it goes": seems to contradict the preceding. 

"come, burn-out, and leave": makes such projects seem predatory.

s/community, in other words/community; in other words/

s/to participate./to participate in./

s/even if I'd never/if I'd never/

The rant on truth belongs elsewhere.

Don't say universe is sealed & infinite in the same paragraph.

= Chapter 3 =

s/heritable/hereditary/

s/tribe of gathers/tribe of herders/ 

s/combined with smart/combined with being smart/

Craziness: also, ladies love outlaws (Waylon) 

s/we accepts/we accept/

Brain sizes: pointless muttering in a irrelevant paragraph.

s/it lets delegate/lets us delegate/

"bakers", "bankers": References to terms only defined in appendix 1.

s/suppression on individual/suppression of individual/

s/Break-down the/Break down the/

s/Fills their/Fill their/

s/rate from by/rate from/

s/a women/a woman/ 

s/poor women/poor woman/ 

s/majory/majority/

"military will lose patience": this doesn't seem to happen, military just rides the gravy train. 

s/like knives can be/like knives, can be/