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diff --git a/draft-ietf-quic-http.txt b/draft-ietf-quic-http.mnot.txt
index 922b3770..fdd6cf0e 100644
--- a/draft-ietf-quic-http.txt
+++ b/draft-ietf-quic-http.mnot.txt
@@ -1032,23 +1032,23 @@ Table of Contents
response is important. The server SHOULD send PUSH_PROMISE frames
prior to sending HEADERS or DATA frames that reference the promised
responses. This reduces the chance that a client requests a resource
that will be pushed by the server.
Due to reordering, push stream data can arrive before the
corresponding PUSH_PROMISE frame. When a client receives a new push
stream with an as-yet-unknown Push ID, both the associated client
request and the pushed request header fields are unknown. The client
can buffer the stream data in expectation of the matching
- PUSH_PROMISE. The client can use stream flow control (see section
- 4.1 of [QUIC-TRANSPORT]) to limit the amount of data a server may
- commit to the pushed stream.
+ PUSH_PROMISE. The client can use stream flow control (see
+ Section 4.1 of [QUIC-TRANSPORT]) to limit the amount of data a server
+ may commit to the pushed stream.
Push stream data can also arrive after a client has canceled a push.
In this case, the client can abort reading the stream with an error
code of H3_REQUEST_CANCELLED. This asks the server not to transfer
additional data and indicates that it will be discarded upon receipt.
Pushed responses that are cacheable (see Section 3 of [CACHING]) can
be stored by the client, if it implements an HTTP cache. Pushed
responses are considered successfully validated on the origin server
(e.g., if the "no-cache" cache response directive is present; see
@@ -2292,21 +2292,21 @@ Table of Contents
IETF and a contact of the HTTP working group (ietf-http-wg@w3.org).
11.2.1. Frame Types
This document establishes a registry for HTTP/3 frame type codes.
The "HTTP/3 Frame Type" registry governs a 62-bit space. This
registry follows the QUIC registry policy; see Section 11.2.
Permanent registrations in this registry are assigned using the
Specification Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for values between
0x00 and 0x3f (in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are assigned using
- Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Section 4.9 and 4.10
+ Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Sections 4.9 and 4.10
of [RFC8126].
While this registry is separate from the "HTTP/2 Frame Type" registry
defined in [HTTP2], it is preferable that the assignments parallel
each other where the code spaces overlap. If an entry is present in
only one registry, every effort SHOULD be made to avoid assigning the
corresponding value to an unrelated operation. Expert reviewers MAY
reject unrelated registrations which would conflict with the same
value in the corresponding registry.
@@ -2355,21 +2355,21 @@ Table of Contents
assigned values.
11.2.2. Settings Parameters
This document establishes a registry for HTTP/3 settings. The
"HTTP/3 Settings" registry governs a 62-bit space. This registry
follows the QUIC registry policy; see Section 11.2. Permanent
registrations in this registry are assigned using the Specification
Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for values between 0x00 and 0x3f
(in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are assigned using Standards
- Action or IESG Approval as defined in Section 4.9 and 4.10 of
+ Action or IESG Approval as defined in Sections 4.9 and 4.10 of
[RFC8126].
While this registry is separate from the "HTTP/2 Settings" registry
defined in [HTTP2], it is preferable that the assignments parallel
each other. If an entry is present in only one registry, every
effort SHOULD be made to avoid assigning the corresponding value to
an unrelated operation. Expert reviewers MAY reject unrelated
registrations which would conflict with the same value in the
corresponding registry.
@@ -2408,21 +2408,21 @@ Table of Contents
assigned values.
11.2.3. Error Codes
This document establishes a registry for HTTP/3 error codes. The
"HTTP/3 Error Code" registry manages a 62-bit space. This registry
follows the QUIC registry policy; see Section 11.2. Permanent
registrations in this registry are assigned using the Specification
Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for values between 0x00 and 0x3f
(in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are assigned using Standards
- Action or IESG Approval as defined in Section 4.9 and 4.10 of
+ Action or IESG Approval as defined in Sections 4.9 and 4.10 of
[RFC8126].
Registrations for error codes are required to include a description
of the error code. An expert reviewer is advised to examine new
registrations for possible duplication with existing error codes.
Use of existing registrations is to be encouraged, but not mandated.
Use of values that are registered in the "HTTP/2 Error Code" registry
is discouraged, and expert reviewers MAY reject such registrations.
In addition to common fields as described in Section 11.2, this
@@ -2518,21 +2518,21 @@ Table of Contents
assigned values.
11.2.4. Stream Types
This document establishes a registry for HTTP/3 unidirectional stream
types. The "HTTP/3 Stream Type" registry governs a 62-bit space.
This registry follows the QUIC registry policy; see Section 11.2.
Permanent registrations in this registry are assigned using the
Specification Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for values between
0x00 and 0x3f (in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are assigned using
- Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Section 4.9 and 4.10
+ Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Sections 4.9 and 4.10
of [RFC8126].
In addition to common fields as described in Section 11.2, permanent
registrations in this registry MUST include the following fields:
Stream Type: A name or label for the stream type.
Sender: Which endpoint on an HTTP/3 connection may initiate a stream
of this type. Values are "Client", "Server", or "Both".
diff --git a/draft-ietf-quic-qpack.txt b/draft-ietf-quic-qpack.mnot.txt
index 233857be..a8b195c9 100644
--- a/draft-ietf-quic-qpack.txt
+++ b/draft-ietf-quic-qpack.mnot.txt
@@ -184,21 +184,21 @@ Table of Contents
capitals, as shown here.
Definitions of terms that are used in this document:
HTTP fields: Metadata sent as part of an HTTP message. The term
encompasses both header and trailer fields. Colloquially, the
term "headers" has often been used to refer to HTTP header fields
and trailer fields; this document uses "fields" for generality.
HTTP field line: A name-value pair sent as part of an HTTP field
- section. See Sections 6.3 and Section 6.5 of [SEMANTICS].
+ section. See Sections 6.3 and 6.5 of [SEMANTICS].
HTTP field value: Data associated with a field name, composed from
all field line values with that field name in that section,
concatenated together with comma separators.
Field section: An ordered collection of HTTP field lines associated
with an HTTP message. A field section can contain multiple field
lines with the same name. It can also contain duplicate field
lines. An HTTP message can include both header and trailer
sections.
diff --git a/draft-ietf-quic-recovery.txt b/draft-ietf-quic-recovery.mnot.txt
index 48753cf6..84bb947f 100644
--- a/draft-ietf-quic-recovery.txt
+++ b/draft-ietf-quic-recovery.mnot.txt
@@ -198,21 +198,21 @@ Table of Contents
In-flight packets: Packets are considered in-flight when they are
ack-eliciting or contain a PADDING frame, and they have been sent
but are not acknowledged, declared lost, or discarded along with
old keys.
3. Design of the QUIC Transmission Machinery
All transmissions in QUIC are sent with a packet-level header, which
indicates the encryption level and includes a packet sequence number
(referred to below as a packet number). The encryption level
- indicates the packet number space, as described in Section 12.3 in
+ indicates the packet number space, as described in Section 12.3 of
[QUIC-TRANSPORT]. Packet numbers never repeat within a packet number
space for the lifetime of a connection. Packet numbers are sent in
monotonically increasing order within a space, preventing ambiguity.
It is permitted for some packet numbers to never be used, leaving
intentional gaps.
This design obviates the need for disambiguating between
transmissions and retransmissions; this eliminates significant
complexity from QUIC's interpretation of TCP loss detection
mechanisms.
diff --git a/draft-ietf-quic-tls.txt b/draft-ietf-quic-tls.mnot.txt
index 85bf39a2..5953f13e 100644
--- a/draft-ietf-quic-tls.txt
+++ b/draft-ietf-quic-tls.mnot.txt
@@ -794,21 +794,21 @@ Table of Contents
Clients can store any state required for resumption along with the
session ticket. Servers can use the session ticket to help carry
state.
Session resumption allows servers to link activity on the original
connection with the resumed connection, which might be a privacy
issue for clients. Clients can choose not to enable resumption to
avoid creating this correlation. Clients SHOULD NOT reuse tickets as
that allows entities other than the server to correlate connections;
- see Section C.4 of [TLS13].
+ see Appendix C.4 of [TLS13].
4.6. 0-RTT
The 0-RTT feature in QUIC allows a client to send application data
before the handshake is complete. This is made possible by reusing
negotiated parameters from a previous connection. To enable this,
0-RTT depends on the client remembering critical parameters and
providing the server with a TLS session ticket that allows the server
to recover the same information.
diff --git a/draft-ietf-quic-transport.txt b/draft-ietf-quic-transport.mnot.txt
index cbfb7bf4..25872125 100644
--- a/draft-ietf-quic-transport.txt
+++ b/draft-ietf-quic-transport.mnot.txt
@@ -1171,21 +1171,21 @@ Table of Contents
A blocked sender is not required to send STREAM_DATA_BLOCKED or
DATA_BLOCKED frames. Therefore, a receiver MUST NOT wait for a
STREAM_DATA_BLOCKED or DATA_BLOCKED frame before sending a
MAX_STREAM_DATA or MAX_DATA frame; doing so could result in the
sender being blocked for the rest of the connection. Even if the
sender sends these frames, waiting for them will result in the sender
being blocked for at least an entire round trip.
When a sender receives credit after being blocked, it might be able
to send a large amount of data in response, resulting in short-term
- congestion; see Section 7.7 in [QUIC-RECOVERY] for a discussion of
+ congestion; see Section 7.7 of [QUIC-RECOVERY] for a discussion of
how a sender can avoid this congestion.
4.3. Flow Control Performance
If an endpoint cannot ensure that its peer always has available flow
control credit that is greater than the peer's bandwidth-delay
product on this connection, its receive throughput will be limited by
flow control.
Packet loss can cause gaps in the receive buffer, preventing the
@@ -4838,21 +4838,21 @@ Table of Contents
14.4. Sending QUIC PMTU Probes
PMTU probes are ack-eliciting packets.
Endpoints could limit the content of PMTU probes to PING and PADDING
frames, since packets that are larger than the current maximum
datagram size are more likely to be dropped by the network. Loss of
a QUIC packet that is carried in a PMTU probe is therefore not a
reliable indication of congestion and SHOULD NOT trigger a congestion
- control reaction; see Section 3, Bullet 7 of [DPLPMTUD]. However,
+ control reaction; see Section 3 of [DPLPMTUD], Bullet 7. However,
PMTU probes consume congestion window, which could delay subsequent
transmission by an application.
14.4.1. PMTU Probes Containing Source Connection ID
Endpoints that rely on the destination connection ID for routing
incoming QUIC packets are likely to require that the connection ID be
included in PMTU probes to route any resulting ICMP messages
(Section 14.2.1) back to the correct endpoint. However, only long
header packets (Section 17.2) contain the Source Connection ID field,
@@ -7971,21 +7971,21 @@ Table of Contents
22.4. QUIC Frame Types Registry
IANA [SHALL add/has added] a registry for "QUIC Frame Types" under a
"QUIC" heading.
The "QUIC Frame Types" registry governs a 62-bit space. This
registry follows the registration policy from Section 22.1.
Permanent registrations in this registry are assigned using the
Specification Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for values between
0x00 and 0x3f (in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are assigned using
- Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Section 4.9 and 4.10
+ Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in Sections 4.9 and 4.10
of [RFC8126].
In addition to the fields in Section 22.1.1, permanent registrations
in this registry MUST include the following field:
Frame Name: A short mnemonic for the frame type.
In addition to the advice in Section 22.1, specifications for new
permanent registrations SHOULD describe the means by which an
endpoint might determine that it can send the identified type of
@@ -8002,21 +8002,21 @@ Table of Contents
IANA [SHALL add/has added] a registry for "QUIC Transport Error
Codes" under a "QUIC" heading.
The "QUIC Transport Error Codes" registry governs a 62-bit space.
This space is split into three regions that are governed by different
policies. Permanent registrations in this registry are assigned
using the Specification Required policy ([RFC8126]), except for
values between 0x00 and 0x3f (in hexadecimal; inclusive), which are
assigned using Standards Action or IESG Approval as defined in
- Section 4.9 and 4.10 of [RFC8126].
+ Sections 4.9 and 4.10 of [RFC8126].
In addition to the fields in Section 22.1.1, permanent registrations
in this registry MUST include the following fields:
Code: A short mnemonic for the parameter.
Description: A brief description of the error code semantics, which
MAY be a summary if a specification reference is provided.
The initial contents of this registry are shown in Table 7.
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