You write so eloquently that the few typos stand out.
Title should be "Our Vision for the Linux Desktop"
"took a good look at the operating system from an overall stance" Just say operating system overall instead of mixing metaphors. Your stance is your attitude towards something, not so much how you look at things.
"we decided that was to narrow a wording as our efforts are ..." : that should be "too narrow" and use a comma and something less ambiguous than "as," → we decided that was too narrow a wording, since our efforts are ...
"used in Red Hat first foray into image based operating systems" → Red Hat's first foray. Also hyphenate multi-word phrase for clarity → image-based operating systems. More hyphenation "a fast moving OS" → fast-moving,
Is the technology "Toolbx" or "Toolbox"? You use both spellings.
'there where some serious deficits... a team of engineers where pushing forward... there where still practical issues... we where looking... we where discussing" → all should be "were"
"So as we were seeing" → Since we were seeing (swap one ambiguity in English for another 😉).
"a lot of things happening in the graphics space horizon" : pick one, either graphics space or things on the horizon in graphics.
"companies such as Collabora was helping" : the singular Collabora is parenthetical to the plural companies → were helping
"dealing with 30 years of technical debt is no easy thing to pay down" : great phrasing, but one too many verb phrases; pick one of "dealing with" and "to pay down".
" but also by porting major applications such as Martin Stransky porting Firefox, and Caolan McNamara porting LibreOffice over to Wayland." : restructure a bit → but also by porting major applications over to Wayland, such as Martin Stransky porting Firefox and Caolan McNamara porting LibreOffice.
between a large host of individual contributors, companies and having the support of the X.org community → between a large host of individual contributors and companies, with the support of the X.org community
he code make the core logic of his new project → he could make
would also be an improvement for us in terms of dealing with combined audio and video sources as guaranteeing audio video sync for instance had often been a challenge in the past → would also be an improvement in dealing with combined audio and video sources; for example, guaranteeing audio video sync for instance had often been a challenge
Wims effort evolved : possessive not plural → Wim's effort
fixing bugs as quickly as they come in and ensure... → to ensure...
one of the most successful launches... we ever done → we have ever done
yet the firmware access under Linux : remove "the," it's not a specific kind of firmware access.
One of the first things we realized was horribly broken was firmware support : this is inelegant, it sounds like you're about to say how horribly broken. Better → We realized firmware support was horribly broken.
we probably [were] better poised to actually do something about this problem than ever : garbled → than anyone ?
since UEFI was causing the firmware update process on most laptops and workstations to become standardized : can you simplify? → since UEFI was standardizing the firmware update process on most laptops and workstations
we teamed Peter up with Richard Hughes and out of that collaboration fwupd and LVFS was born → we teamed Peter up with Richard Hughes, and out of that collaboration fwupd and LVFS were born
You need to explain the LVFS acronym.
"to now having a lot of hardware getting firmware update support and more getting added almost on a weekly basis." → to a lot of hardware getting firmware update support, with more added almost on a weekly basis
the best source of information is Richard Hughes twitter account. → Richard Hughes' Twitter account
For those who has been using Linux → who have been
There was a lot of hacks → were
There was a lot of hacks being used out there to deal with that situation, of varying degree of fragility → There were (hacks) , but better → Many hacks, of varying degrees of fragility, were used to deal with that situation
And with gaps I mean fixing → And by "gaps," I mean...
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I'm a happy Fedora KDE spin user for many years. It just keeps getting better. I'm not sure how or when to jump to Silverblue from dnf system-update.